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Internal Transfer – Personal Statement

Internal Transfer – Personal Statement

  • Type of paperAdmission Essay
  • SubjectFinance
  • Number of pages2
  • Format of citationNot Applicable
  • Number of cited resources0
  • Type of serviceWriting from scratch

I′m an NYU student that will be applying to internally transfer to the prestigious Stern School of Business; right now, I am registered under the Steinhardt School of Culture, Education & Human Development as a Music Education major. In order to transfer, I need to fill out a personal statement, which is what I would like written. These are the questions I need to answer within the personal statement. ″1. What has changed since your enrollment in your current program that has prompted you to seek an internal transfer admission? 2. What have you been doing to prepare for study in your proposed new school or college and/or major? 3. Briefly describe how you feel your educational goals can be better achieved in this program of study?″ The attached file is my previous transfer essay to get into the College of Arts and Sciences to get a general idea of how the essay should be structured. Use the information established here about my background as to why I transferred out, but I will also outline it here. As for what changed since my enrollment in my current program, her is my answer: ″Within choir, there are those ethereal moments where everything comes together both musically and emotionally, and the skin on your body feels a tingle that seems to last for just a few fleeting moments. Those moments do not celebrate musicality; they celebrate companionship, as everyone else feels those fleeting moments just as you do. The celebration of a community built upon unconditional love is the ultimate end goal of what I strive for in my life, and I applied as a Music Education major because I believed that choir and music were the only avenues that led to that type of connection within a group. I believed that, if I were to become a choral director, I would achieve that sense of community and companionship within singing, which was my passion. Music Education represented the best of both worlds. However, when I got to NYU and went to Steinhardt orientation during Welcome Week, I learned that my romanticized expectations were not at all congruent with reality. Though it may seem naïve, I realized on that first day that the passion that lowered my stress would eventually end up being the main cause of it if I stayed on my current course. As a musician who wanted to keep singing, and wants to make sure music is always a part of my life, I refused to let that happen. What I also realized in full extent was that there would forever be a barrier between teacher and class, and that, though it may seem obvious, I would no longer be the one singing with the group. Rather, I would take on the role of conducting and organizing; a role that still has immense meaning, but did not fit within the framework of what I wanted to achieve which was connection. After learning this, I made the decision then and there that this was not the path I ultimately wanted to travel on; as such, I can′t continue in Music Education.″ For what I′ve been doing to prepare for study in my proposed new school; I essentially dropped all of the music courses I was required to take, and instead focused on trying to complete NYU′s core as well as take some Economics and Math courses. I took Intro to Microeconomics, Intro to Macroeconomics, Math For Economics I, and Writing the Essay in my Fall semester, and did very well, earning 3 A-s in Micro, Math, and Writing the Essay, and an A for Intro to Macro, making me have a 3.775 GPA. In Spring semester, I′ve fallen in love with Principles of Financial Accounting as one of the few business courses I′m able to take, and know now that this is the path that I wish to pursue. I′m also fulfilling other parts of my core by taking classes in Texts & Ideas, as well as continuing Math in Math for Econ II to continue my preparation in fulfilling as many requirements as I can. I also plan on enrolling in the summer of this year in taking classes that I can use to further fulfill my core requirement. As for how my educational goals can be better achieved in this program of study: ″Business encompasses how people, whether as actors of countries, or of their own personal motivations, interact with each other, which is the basis of all forms of connection and communication. Within the realm of finance, my educational goal of getting involved with community and connection becomes aligned with my program of study, whereas with music it was not. By engaging myself entirely within the Business program at Stern, I will better immerse myself by specializing more in terms of the knowledge of how people interact with each other in terms of managing their own desires and wants in contest with what they are willing to do with their finite resources, whether it means trading with others, or maximizing what they can do on their own. I can create legitimate solvency and change for issues that I care about, and can engross myself into the community by continuing to study this, as that′s what is most important to me.″

Answer

Having been involved in Chamber Choir at high school quite literally changed my life; I essentially had metamorphosis out of my shy personality, blossoming into a social butterfly that became outgoing because of the support I was given in that environment. When you’re in the choir room, nothing, whether gender, race or sexuality, matters except for you voice and the work you do to contribute to a greater goal of something more; that something being music. Singing was my stress reliever; all of the emotions I had built up, whether it was stress about my future or the fear of rejection of my sexuality, I could release through song right alongside my friends. Everyone exposes their own personal vulnerabilities when singing together, and ultimately everyone within the choir grows closer as a group. Within choir, there are those ethereal moments where everything comes together both musically and emotionally, and the skin on your body feels a tingle that seems to last for just a few fleeting moments. Those moments do not celebrate musicality; they celebrate companionship, as everyone else feels those fleeting moments just as you do. The celebration of a community built upon unconditional love is the ultimate end goal of what I strive for in my life, and I applied as a Music Education major because I believed that choir and music were the only avenues that led to that type of connection within a group. I believed that, if I were to become a choral director, I would achieve that sense of community and companionship within singing, which was my passion. Music Education represented the best of both worlds.

However, when I got to NYU and went to Steinhardt orientation during Welcome Week, I learned that my romanticized expectations were not at all congruent with reality. Though it may seem naïve, I realized on that first day that the passion that lowered my stress would eventually end up being the main cause of it if I stayed on my current course. As a musician who wanted to keep singing, and wants to make sure music is always a part of my life, I refused to let that happen. What I also realized in full extent was that there would forever be a barrier between teacher and class, and that, though it may seem obvious, I would no longer be the one singing with the group. Rather, I would take on the role of conducting and organizing; a role that still has immense meaning, but did not fit within the framework of what I wanted to achieve which was connection. After learning this, I made the decision then and there that this was not the path I ultimately wanted to travel on, and for that reason, I knew I could not stay within the Teaching Music program at NYU. I then decided to pursue the only other avenue that I could see myself doing not only as a major but as a career; economics.

In order to prepare for my new major, I spent time vigorously emailing as many people within the Music Education department, explaining about my predicament, and ultimately I was given the advice to basically apply for the internal transfer for Spring of 2018. However, in order to ensure that my stress reliever never became a source of discomfort, I nipped the problem in the bud. I ended up taking Intro to Microeconomics with Professor Andrew Paizis, Intro to Macroeconomics with Professor Gerald McIntyre, and Math for Economics 1 with Professor Antonio DeRosa in place of my required music courses. This guaranteed that no aspect of my overall happy experience with music would be at risk, while it also ensured that I would not fall behind in Spring semester. The classes themselves have been lively and enjoyable; no lecture is ever dull or boring not only because of the eccentric and upbeat nature of my professors, but also because of the subject matter directly correlating to my own aspirations.

Within my Economics classes, I feel as though I am in my element in the same way that music does. Ultimately, the parallelisms between economics and music ended up being clear to me after engaging with each of the three courses. Economics is a social science; at base, it deals with how society tries to evaluate its unlimited wants and desires with its finite amount of resources. It encompasses how people, whether as actors of countries, or of their own personal motivations, interact with each other, which is the basis of all forms of connection and communication. Within the realm of economics, my educational goal of getting involved with community and connection becomes aligned with my program of study, whereas with music it was not. By engaging myself entirely within the economics program at NYU, I will better immerse myself by specializing more in terms of the knowledge of how people interact with each other in terms of managing their own desires and wants in contest with what they are willing to do with their finite resources, whether it means trading with others, or maximizing what they can do on their own.

Overall, the pursuit and end goal of my education here at NYU has not changed; I want to truly engage myself into that sense of community. However, my understanding toward the avenues on how to get there has changed, and I wish to change my program of study to economics to reflect this. I have done the necessary research onto what classes to take, and have done preemptive steps by enrolling in Intro to Microeconomics, Intro to Macroeconomics, and Math for Economics 1 as an assurance. Taking these classes has made me realize that the community engagement I want can be replicated by learning about the overarching basis of managing desires and self-motivation with our society’s limited resources. Moving forward, I want to continue studying economics so that I may pursue that end goal far more effectively and with more direction than my current situation.